剑6写作范文及解析 | Test2 运动员收入更高是否合理

双边类大作文，社会类话题

Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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题目大意

成功的体育专业人士可以比其他重要职业的人赚更多的钱。一些人认为这是完全合理的，而另一些人认为这是不公平的。讨论双方观点并给出自己的观点。

思路解析

这是一道双边类大作文，聊的是不同职业收入高低的合理性。双边类的题目，需要对每个观点分别表达同意或反对，最终的结论就是自己的立场，可以是中立（双方都同意或都反对），也可以是单边支持某一方立场。审题的时候要注意比较双方：“Successful sports professionals” 和 “people in other important professions”，因此在论证是否合理和公平时，需要围绕这两者的特性展开。

首先来看不公平的原因。相较于医生、科学家等专业人士，运动员对于社会的贡献并不及前者。医生能够挽救病人的生命、科学家能够推动科技进步进而促进社会的发展，而运动员除了满足观众的休闲娱乐需求、让观众在观看比赛的过程中获得快感外，对推动社会进步和发展似乎并起不到实际作用。因此，把社会贡献作为衡量工资标准的话，运动员的高工资是不公平的。

然后来看合理的原因，有两方面。

一是体育明星的高工资并仅仅挂钩社会贡献，还有商业价值等因素。体育明星本身拥有巨大的流量关注，这些流量对于商家来说有着很大的广告价值，因此商家会找明星进行广告代言并给出相应的报酬。

二是体育运动本身具有一定的风险，激烈的竞争往往会给运动员带来伤病，甚至威胁到其未来的生活。同时，运动员的职业生涯相较于医生或科学家是非常短暂的，可能只有几年时间。因此短时间内高收入是对运动员退役之后生活的保障，甚至包含了康复治疗的支出。

范文示例

I shall argue for reasons why some vote unjustifiability in the distance between earnings among outperforming athletes and among practitioner in other key areas, and why rationalities are witnessed in the disparity. 

The unfairness denounced by some chasing for the balanced payments would manifest the value of “justice” in terms of the social contribution and the so-called “human rights” in a restrict direction. Sports areas, they reckon, are with no concrete impact to the realistic social and individual advance objectively. None of the runners, ball-players, or jumpers would generate benefits to those strained in famine, to people suffering the medical pains, or to the people awaiting resources or materials in desolated locations. What the high-paid athletes do is to stimulate the hormones of watchers curled up in couch or sitting in the audience benches. What is deeply severe is that besides the huge amount of money poured into the accounts of those sports professionals, a less abundant, or even limited wage is acquired monthly by those who are engaging in the areas playing a key role in the entire social sectors. Such social contributors, most of whom are struggling with their life around hardship provided by the ignorance of the public, but promoting the social paces scientifically and medically, deserve more attention and cares in terms of the monetary enduing. 

Clearly, this state of mind would sound too harsh and ruthless, since it hasn’t put the fierce realities and practical situations of those athletes into their consideration. What they are devoting to may with the seeming insignificance, but the profound influence endued by the athletic industry indeed has promoted the whole world into the pace of love, unity and peacefulness, and that may be what the sportsmanship is generated for. Potential commercial properties lying behind this area is also gestating an abundance of businesses, purchasers as well as employments in the world market. Besides, professionals engaging in this physical culture all live with harsh elements, internally and externally, which makes them worth of giving a relatively larger amount of income, since they on the one hand are enduring the extreme pressures of competition, in which the failure may be intolerable because people only care about the champions, without sharing any glance at those failing to outdo others in their major. However, what sounds tragical is that prodigies in this area are always shining too brightly too soon, meaning they have no enough time to pace slowly and sufficiently in their life career. As a result, they must make their abundant living in a short time before they are obsolete in the talent market by paying prices of extremely hard work, sweaty and wounding repeat of practices, and the chance of never being outstanding from the crowded giftedness. 

To sum up, the consideration of the injustice of the payment given between the athletes and other professionals may be somewhat understandable, but whether we should balance the financial allocation should seriously consider the overall components and properties in those vocational paths.

相关词汇和语法结构

Denounce 谴责、指责、斥责

Restrict direction 限制方向

Reckon 估计、估摸

Strain 压力

Desolate 荒凉、凄凉

Curled up 蜷缩

Endue 赋予

Ruthless 无情、冷酷无情

Intolerable 难以忍受

Outdo 超越

Tragical 悲剧

Obsolete 过时、陈旧