西安托福考前培训机构，如今，我们想获取托福写作高分并非遥不可及，尤其能在独立写作中用好例证的话，26分以上基本水到渠成了。
在官方指南OG中，5分的要求之一是using clearly appropriate explanations, specific details and examples to support your view. 可见举好“例子”的重要，今天就聊聊如何拿下这颗“栗子”。
首先，请小伙伴看一段学生写的例证，找找有哪些（思路上）错误。
Advertisers persuade customers to buy the products by displaying a more attractive product image. In other words, advertisers would exaggerate or overemphasize the product benefits to sell more to consumers. For example, when I was still six years old in primary school, I liked watching TV a lot. One day, I was so attracted by McDonald’s Happy Meal advertisement in which I saw young children played with some fun toys and gulped down some crispy chicken nuggets. Back then, I loved nuggets very much. After watching the ad over and over again, I asked my dad to take me to McDonald’s. At first, he did not want to but eventually gave in. You know what? I ordered the same Happy Meal and the food tasted awful. So both my dad and I were rather disappointed.
不难发现，本段的主要问题是：一，例子与中心句关系不紧密；二，例子的篇幅控制不好。要处理好这两个问题，首先，我们来了解核心段拓展中几个重要的概念：统一性(unity), 连贯性 (coherence)和渐进性 (progression)。
Unity: the entire paragraph focuses on one single idea, avoiding idea repetition or irrelevant points.
Coherence: sentences in a paragraph are organized in a clear and logical order.
Progression: the process of developing ideas gradually from one stage to another.
简单来说在例证时，我们需要用具体的例子与中心句及解释的部分挂钩，有逻辑的用具象事物去演绎分论点的逻辑关系，同时避免出现重复、无关的细节。思维导图如下：
中心句/主题句-> 解释分论点-> 举例+相关细节-> 回顾分论点/点题
那么，我们一起来改进这个段落吧。
Advertisers persuade customers to buy the products by displaying a more attractive product image. In other words, advertisers would exaggerate or overemphasize the product benefits to sell more to consumers. （这句是对中心句的解释，没有大问题；建议原因写得再透彻些） For example, when I was still six years old in primary school,I liked watching TV a lot.（喜欢看电视这个细节和本段主题无关，违背了“统一性”） One day, I was so attracted by McDonald’s Happy Meal advertisement in which I saw young children played with some fun toys and gulped down some crispy chicken nuggets. Back then, I loved nuggets very much. （又一处无关主题的细节）After watching the ad over and over again, I asked my dad to take me to McDonald’s. At first, he did not want to but eventually gave in. （叙述性的内容过度了）You know what? （过于口语化的衔接）I ordered the same Happy Meal and the food tasted awful.（少了必要的细节，没有交待这个广告如何的夸大产品，让顾客觉得与现实有差距） So both my dad and I were rather disappointed. （没有将例子和本段的论点结合或点题）
经过修改，我们有了下面的版本。
Advertisers persuade customers to buy the products by displaying a more attractive product image. Naturally, we would be appealed by something that is desirable and gravitated towards the virtual products that are close to perfect, which justifies why advertisers exaggerate or overemphasize the product benefits to sell more.
For example, as a six-year-old boy, I was mesmerized by the back-then McDonald’s Happy Meal advertisement featuring fancy toys and crispy chicken nuggets and therefore pestered my parents to take me to the fast food restaurant, only to find that those toys broke easily and nuggets were overly fried. However, I would not have ordered the meal if I had not watched the misleading advertisement.
当然，除了写好个人经历式的例子，高分的文章看重例子的多样性和代表性，所以我们不妨学习和积累其他的举例方式，如：
1.泛泛的、罗列式举例。每个例子的细节不多，但同类别的可以多写几个。
Technology has equipped children with professional tools which could finally realize their imagination. This takes form particularly as computer software and applications, such as Photoshop for creative graphic design, Overture for easily composing a piece of music, 3D Max for building up a virtual world. All these applications were never as handy as they are at present, and this would absolutely enables our children to realize their creativity.
2.具备性的专家意见及数据统计或调查结果。虽然考官不会在意这些观点和数据的真假，但我们尽可能拼对专家、机构的名字，并积累一些引出观点的句型。如：
Overindulging children with material things can be harmful to their growth. American writer and pediatrician Benjamin Spock points out that overindulged children may become, to certain extent, greedy and self-centered. In addition, he says, often these children are not as creative in their play as children with fewer playthings, because they are not challenged. Mr. Spock concludes that if every request is satisfied the moment it is made, these children will not be able to deal with a delay in gratification when they grow up.
又如：
Drinking too much wine causes liver damage. A recent study can back up this point. The study, conducted by the John Hopkins University School of Medicine, has found a causal relationship between drinking more than 12 ounces of beer regularly and fatty liver.
3.名人类的例子。具备代表性的名人经历、事件也能增加例子的可性度。
Corporal punishment does more harm to children’s physical growth, leaving much shadow on the psychological well-being of the young. An example goes to the American pop superstar, Michael Jackson. When he was a child, his father slapped him badly whenever he did not want to dance as expected. At some incidents of this kind, he broke up with his father. The father and son relationship never reconciled afterwards, leaving Jackson an emotional scar never recovered.
以上便是托福写作如何举例的小贴士，有了正确的例证思路，加上合理的破题和过硬的语言表达功底，相信小伙伴们一定能nail写作26+。
